Friday, October 14, 2011
step one
What is love? Love is seen and felt in different ways throughout the world. We see love, hear about love, and some of us are lucky enough to feel love. We cannot live with it. Love is a feeling that people fail to describe but there is one thing we all should know, you cannot be forced to love we simply must fall.
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Some very confusing statements. What are you trying to say in the sentence about "money and kids"? Are you equating a relationship with love? If so, you need to make that clear.
ReplyDeleteAfter reading your introduction I do not get a sense of what specifically you are going to be focussing on, but also why your reader should care.
You need to bring into focus what will be examined about love in your tapestry and why it is important to understanding what it means to be human.
i took out some parts of my introduction so that i could make things more clear. Should I be adding more about what i think empty love is? I just think that the best way to bescribe empty love is the last sentence of my paragraph. Should i be adding more?
ReplyDeletethis sounds really good daniella, it is a great introduction that will capture the readers attention!
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